Please have a look on my OOTS styled comic based on Baldur´s Gate - again!

[CelesJessa]

11. the reason why I posted this here is to get feedback on how to improve it

People have been giving you feedback on how to improve. It would be a lot more effective if you didn't just dismiss and challenge every single thing someone says, save for, what, two tiny things that really has nothing to do with improving your comic at all? A great way to make people not want to critique your work is to argue with every single point they come up with. Especially after

using a different style is NOT improving it (see 4)
using a different story is NOT improving it (see 10)

If people can't critique the art or the story, what is there left to critique?


As far as my own experience in art and storytelling, I've learned that if you have to explain why whatever you're doing is working, then it is obviously not working.

5. if I´m wordy (which I´m not), what about http://www.giantitp.com/comics/oots0490.html

Just because that other comic is more wordy than you are doesn't make you not wordy.

As for actual critique, (which I already realize means absolutely nothing because you'll just argue with everything I say and explain why, in fact, whatever I am critiquing is not problematic) I have to agree that the language makes it kind of hard to read. I have no idea what "Brr, your rooker is cold like the *eighth*" is supposed to mean.

And the art, (and this is coming from someone who is not a long time reader of Order of the Stick), I really don't think that style is working for the SERIOUS storytelling that is apparently going on. The bright colors and goofy-looking cartoony characters just subconsciously sets me up expecting some kind of joke. It's not completely impossible to use such a style to tell something serious, but as it is right now, I really can't take whatever SERIOUS stuff that's going on seriously because of the style. Seriously.

I'm well aware that you are dead set in your ways, but I'm just saying. I'm aware that you're making this for yourself as you've said, but the minute you post it online ASKING FOR COMMENTS is the moment that you have to expect people to maybe not share your same ideals of what makes a perfect comic. You aren't required to agree with them, or change anything to please anyone else, but arguing with critique when you ask for critique is just... I dunno, counterproductive?