The Dreadful -- Chapter 3

[Kim]

Aizen is the main antagonist in Bleach, and is also magically behind everything ever despite the incredible implausibility (and arguable impossibility) of that actually being the case.

[MSperoni]

Ah okay. I've never seen/read Bleach so I didn't know.

I should probably start looking into these things. I'm generally at a loss as to what to do in The Dreadful to make it more enjoyable/popular with readers. I think if I weren't so ignorant about what comic/anime/game fans were into these days it might help.

Then again, for all I know I should just go with it how I've been doing and make changes when I think they're needed. For example, I think I should keep the talking scenes to a minimum and put in more action and "move" the story along faster.

I guess one good thing is that it keeps me interested in working on it. I want to improve and make the best I can. It's a good challenge.

I'm always interested in feedback/suggestions. I can't promise that I will always listen, but I'm up for reading 'em.

[Kerensky287]

Originally Posted by InsaneGenius

It's Aizen also known as Tite Kubo also known as NonCon also kown as Captain Asspull also known as Captain Invincible also known as Captain Something, pick any word put if after Captain and you have a potential alias.

???

[MSperoni]

EDIT: Seriously, his first name is "Captain".

[Kim]

Originally Posted by MSperoni

Ah okay. I've never seen/read Bleach so I didn't know.

I should probably start looking into these things. I'm generally at a loss as to what to do in The Dreadful to make it more enjoyable/popular with readers. I think if I weren't so ignorant about what comic/anime/game fans were into these days it might help.

Then again, for all I know I should just go with it how I've been doing and make changes when I think they're needed. For example, I think I should keep the talking scenes to a minimum and put in more action and "move" the story along faster.

I guess one good thing is that it keeps me interested in working on it. I want to improve and make the best I can. It's a good challenge.

I'm always interested in feedback/suggestions. I can't promise that I will always listen, but I'm up for reading 'em.

If you want to keep The Dreadful good, Bleach should probably not act as any major source of inspiration. :P I like what you're doing. Keep it up. I think the thing with there not being a lot of talk at the moment is there isn't a whole lot to say. We don't have enough background info to make any meaningful plot guesses, and it's good so we don't really have any complaining to do. For the former, that will change with time as we read more and get more familiar with the world and characters. As such, until then, you're only alternative to make us talk about the comic more is to make it worse so we can get mad about how it was good before you SOLD OUT.

[MSperoni]

Oh, I can make it worse! *adds talking politically incorrect duck for comedic relief* *he's also a doctor so he can make constant Quack jokes about himself*

But seriously, I guess I'll just keep it as I've been doing it and not worry too much about it unless people start complaining. I've gone over the script a few times in my notes and in my head and made some changes, and I think everything's really gonna pick up here soon. Well, soon in regards to where I'm at in the pages. It'll be awhile in terms of it actually being posted on the site. Maybe I can talk to Brian about posting three pages a week every now and then.

[Kerensky287]

Originally Posted by MSperoni

Oh, I can make it worse! *adds talking politically incorrect duck for comedic relief* *he's also a doctor so he can make constant Quack jokes about himself*

Oh my god.

I challenge you to do this.

Play it straight. Play it seriously. And make him a sympathetic character.

[MSperoni]

Like he was shot in the leg by a hunter so he limps around all the time? Like House, but a Duck? If it could just be any bird we could call it: Grouse.

[ElCone1979]

Originally Posted by MSperoni

Updates to Page 32: I fixed the typo on panel one, and then I changed the "slamdunk.jpg" line to something else. I just finished Emailing the redone page to Brian and he'll upload it when he can

I'm not sure when the site will display the new page, it might be a few weeks. It took a very long time for page 007 to update to the new version. I have also sent Brian an updated version of page 29, which fixed panel 2 so the hoof prints actually look like hoof prints.

This page has not changed yet , it still has the "slamdunk.jpg" that (that I recall) some people (including my self) considered that it was out of place.

[MSperoni]

Yeah, I'm not quite sure why the site hasn't fixed that yet. Brian said he replaced it, so it's a mystery to me.

I changed it so Kit says "That was horri-bull!" instead of "slamdunk.jpg" . If The Dreadful ever sees print, I'll make sure all the changes are made.

(though if The Dreadful ever sees print, I will also ask the publisher if it's okay for me to redo the first 70 pages so the style matches).