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Unread 02-15-2011, 04:31 PM   #11
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Unread 02-15-2011, 04:43 PM   #12
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Well, I suppose at least there's a back ground now. And... tables that are bigger than the character. And. Y'know. Almost every problem that's already been mentioned.
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Unread 02-15-2011, 04:50 PM   #13
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Still shows up as a jpg to me, fuzziness and all. How exactly are you saving these - just to make sure no errors pop up during the process itself.

It's also still amazingly tiny and while not difficult to read, certainly very uncomfortable to read. Please make these larger. You'll need to use an external image hosting service but there's really no way around it.

There's text overlapping the boundaries of your speech bubbles, which looks really sloppy. Generally there should be some space between the text and the actual edge of the bubble, or it'll look cramped and be, again, hard to read. Another good reason for larger panels and larger images.

The background's an improvement, although the perspectives clash - FF sprites are more or less made for a side-view perspective, which isn't the background's perspective. Still, it's a start.
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Unread 02-15-2011, 04:50 PM   #14
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Make it bigger.
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Unread 02-15-2011, 04:54 PM   #15
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I love this comic so much. Please make more and use the advice posted.
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Unread 02-15-2011, 05:26 PM   #16
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I will fix the thing with the text bubbles
And i will eventually fix the size
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Unread 02-15-2011, 05:29 PM   #17
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Your characters are 8 bit, your scenery should be 8 bit.
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Unread 02-15-2011, 05:37 PM   #18
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I will when the tavern scene is over
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Unread 02-15-2011, 05:38 PM   #19
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Unread 02-15-2011, 05:39 PM   #20
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Angles are wonky. That the scenery has shadows, but the character doesn't make this painfully clear.

Also, seriously, bigger panels. A single panel should be the size of your whole comic. Just find an image hosting thing.

If you plan on sticking to the four panel format, maybe try setting them horizontally.

Speech bubbles and speech font need fixing. What program are you using to make these? If you're using Paint Dot Net, I can recommend some stuff for doing proper speech balloons and a better font to use. If you're using Photoshop or something like that, I'm sure someone else here can set you straight. If you're using MS Paint, go download Paint Dot Net before I die inside.

EDIT: If you're going to use sprites, try to customize them to some degree.
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