A Short Story by Me!

Crodevillian Team · 09-02-2005, 08:24 PM

Slightly altered to not include the short story, which has passed its prime. I like to keep things "fresh." If, for some reason, you want to read it, PM me. But that's being egotistical and assuming anyone would want to read it. And now I feel like I'm fishing for sympathy, but I'm not. At any rate, I've deleted the story. :-)

BlackMageGirl! · 09-02-2005, 08:44 PM

Heh, this is definitely your style Croteam, I can tell you that much.

How you added that both mediums are needed to make things work, instead of the pretty princess being dumb and the younger sister being correct in everything. Makes it more real, actually.

Great job. ^^

Meister · 09-03-2005, 05:38 AM

An excellent story, Croteam. I bow to your writing.

RickZarber · 09-03-2005, 09:53 AM

That was fantastic. Utterly fantastic. Can this man do no wrong in his creative endeavours?

Gorefiend · 09-03-2005, 09:30 PM

Nice job. Very entertaining. I love the way you get little jokes in every now and then, like:
I wish I got as many reviews as you...
"A few even argued that it was entirely up to the Queen herself to make a decision that would best suit her wants and needs, but everyone laughed at them, so they went home."

Great work.

CheshireThief · 09-04-2005, 01:08 PM

I give this story the coveted "Applause-worthy" rating.

AW+

09-05-2005, 08:36 AM

I give this a 5/5 rateing.

Good job.

Dragonsbane · 09-05-2005, 06:35 PM

Croteam...you, sir, have made a really great thing (RGT) in this. I am utterly awed. My mouth hangs open in respect.

Azisien · 09-05-2005, 07:11 PM

That was pretty good. The structure and lack of errors impress me more than the story itself. It was decent, but the fact that I didn't spot a single problem with the writing in my single read speaks for itself. I surf the Internet, so naturally I expect "teh u r teh hax lol." Or at the very least, a g instead of G.

Oh, right, the short story. It was pretty good.

Crodevillian Team · 09-05-2005, 07:39 PM

I'm glad my punctuation marks made such an impression on you. Thank you, all, for your very kind remarks.

09-02-2005, 08:24 PM	#1
Crodevillian Team You -got- my postcard?! Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Roewer Posts: 786	A Short Story by Me! Slightly altered to not include the short story, which has passed its prime. I like to keep things "fresh." If, for some reason, you want to read it, PM me. But that's being egotistical and assuming anyone would want to read it. And now I feel like I'm fishing for sympathy, but I'm not. At any rate, I've deleted the story. :-)

09-03-2005, 09:53 AM	#4
RickZarber Please Be Well Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Virginia Posts: 2,715	That was fantastic. Utterly fantastic. Can this man do no wrong in his creative endeavours? __________________ Twitter / Art Tumblr / Personal Tumblr

09-03-2005, 09:30 PM	#5
Gorefiend That Guy Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: The city that doesn't sleep Posts: 1,039	Nice job. Very entertaining. I love the way you get little jokes in every now and then, like: I wish I got as many reviews as you... "A few even argued that it was entirely up to the Queen herself to make a decision that would best suit her wants and needs, but everyone laughed at them, so they went home." Great work. __________________ The world of truth has no certainty. The world of fact has no hope. "Environmental laws were not passed to protect our air and water... they were passed to get votes. Seasonal anti-smut campaigns are not conducted to rid our communities of moral rot... they are conducted to give an aura of saintliness to the office-seekers who demand them." - Frank Zappa, prelude to Joe's Garage Ever wonder THE TRUTH ABOUT BLACK HELICOPTERS?

09-04-2005, 01:08 PM	#6
CheshireThief Still RaiRai's ***** Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Shut up, KP. Posts: 2,365	I give this story the coveted "Applause-worthy" rating. AW+ __________________ Holy crap! A CheshireThief spotting!

09-02-2005, 08:44 PM	#2
BlackMageGirl! Oh hi! :D Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Currently in reality! Posts: 2,688	Heh, this is definitely your style Croteam, I can tell you that much. How you added that both mediums are needed to make things work, instead of the pretty princess being dumb and the younger sister being correct in everything. Makes it more real, actually. Great job. ^^

09-03-2005, 05:38 AM	#3
Meister Pure joy Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Germany Posts: 10,689	An excellent story, Croteam. I bow to your writing.

09-05-2005, 08:36 AM	#7
Admiral_Kelly Guest Posts: n/a	I give this a 5/5 rateing. Good job.

09-05-2005, 07:11 PM	#9
Azisien wat Join Date: Jan 2005 Posts: 7,177	That was pretty good. The structure and lack of errors impress me more than the story itself. It was decent, but the fact that I didn't spot a single problem with the writing in my single read speaks for itself. I surf the Internet, so naturally I expect "teh u r teh hax lol." Or at the very least, a g instead of G. Oh, right, the short story. It was pretty good.

09-05-2005, 07:39 PM	#10
Crodevillian Team You -got- my postcard?! Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Roewer Posts: 786	I'm glad my punctuation marks made such an impression on you. Thank you, all, for your very kind remarks.