The Dreadful -- Chapter 4 - Page 9

phil_ · 01-13-2012, 11:34 PM

Just checking, but it has gotten weird now, right?

SaltyKracka · 01-13-2012, 11:53 PM

Spider-Burke!
Spider-Burke
Does whatever a...Spider-Burke does
Can it swing?
From a web
Probably not cause the damn thing's huge
Run away
Here comes that Spider-Burke
Doo-doo~

MSperoni · 01-14-2012, 12:37 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by phil_

Just checking, but it has gotten weird now, right?

Well, weird is a matter of opinion. So to some peeps this may be as weird as it gets. However, in my opinion: No, it has not gotten weird yet.

Mr.Bookworm · 01-14-2012, 04:16 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by phil_

Just checking, but it has gotten weird now, right?

Wait til it puts on a ten gallon and spurs.

MSperoni · 01-17-2012, 11:39 AM

Page 92!

We interrupt your Creepy Spider Demon programming with...

BigDemonicBunny · 01-18-2012, 12:08 AM

On one hand, it's probably just a dream. On the other hand, considering the rest of the bunch I could totally see The Judge having creepy dream haunting powers.

MSperoni · 01-20-2012, 03:15 PM

Page 93!

NOW I think it is starting to get weird.

Domestibot · 01-20-2012, 04:45 PM

I dig Erin's conversation with herself, but I'm just gonna throw out my two cents:

Since you kinda lost her German mannerisms and diction, it's (only a bit) tedious to kind of have to read the whole panel, determine who is saying what, then reread it again in context.

Again, it only takes like an extra two seconds to guess who is saying what. Erin at this point seems to have been relegated to the role of clueless wanderer, and goth-fairy girl would be the one saying anything... well, Goth. The point I'm making is that without any form of sound and only having text to go on, we kind of have to read the whole thing and go "okay, Erin is saying that."

I think a good way to consider clarifying whom is speaking right off the bat would be to give each character their own respective speech bubble, kind of like Brian did for Garland, Vilbert, Black Mage when he was evil, etc. Some kind of distinction like that (even if it's only a subtle font change or outline of the bubble) would probably help.

Lettering is something I've done in the past, so I'm just trying to give you something to consider. Even if you keep things as is, it's still understandable.

MSperoni · 01-20-2012, 05:24 PM

Different letters for Ith is a pretty great idea actually. I don't know why I didn't think of that at first. I just need to find a good font for it.

A Zarkin' Frood · 01-20-2012, 05:34 PM

I was about to suggest the same thing. Actually. While it's not much a problem it would at least safe us the time to figure out who's saying what.

01-13-2012, 11:34 PM	#81
phil_ Just sleeping Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: At home, probably in bed. Posts: 6,482	Just checking, but it has gotten weird now, right? __________________ Be T-Rexcellent to each other, tako.

01-17-2012, 11:39 AM	#85
MSperoni Artist and Writer of Comics Join Date: Aug 2009 Posts: 2,666	Page 92! We interrupt your Creepy Spider Demon programming with... __________________ I do commissions! So Email me if you'd like anything and we'll work out the details! matts_1104@yahoo.com Follow me on Twitter for Dreadful news and random info! (though mostly it's just me babbling about nerd-stuff) http://twitter.com/#!/mSperoni Check out my Deviant Art page if you'd like to see other pictures I've made! http://exmile.deviantart.com/ Follow The Dreadful on Facebook!

01-20-2012, 03:15 PM	#87
MSperoni Artist and Writer of Comics Join Date: Aug 2009 Posts: 2,666	Page 93! NOW I think it is starting to get weird. __________________ I do commissions! So Email me if you'd like anything and we'll work out the details! matts_1104@yahoo.com Follow me on Twitter for Dreadful news and random info! (though mostly it's just me babbling about nerd-stuff) http://twitter.com/#!/mSperoni Check out my Deviant Art page if you'd like to see other pictures I've made! http://exmile.deviantart.com/ Follow The Dreadful on Facebook!

01-20-2012, 05:24 PM	#89
MSperoni Artist and Writer of Comics Join Date: Aug 2009 Posts: 2,666	Different letters for Ith is a pretty great idea actually. I don't know why I didn't think of that at first. I just need to find a good font for it. __________________ I do commissions! So Email me if you'd like anything and we'll work out the details! matts_1104@yahoo.com Follow me on Twitter for Dreadful news and random info! (though mostly it's just me babbling about nerd-stuff) http://twitter.com/#!/mSperoni Check out my Deviant Art page if you'd like to see other pictures I've made! http://exmile.deviantart.com/ Follow The Dreadful on Facebook!

01-20-2012, 05:34 PM	#90
A Zarkin' Frood formerly known as Prince. Join Date: Oct 2008 Location: Right here, with you >:) Posts: 2,395	I was about to suggest the same thing. Actually. While it's not much a problem it would at least safe us the time to figure out who's saying what. __________________ >:( C-:

01-13-2012, 11:53 PM	#82
SaltyKracka Impossibly White Join Date: Sep 2011 Location: My own little dream world Posts: 135	Spider-Burke! Spider-Burke Does whatever a...Spider-Burke does Can it swing? From a web Probably not cause the damn thing's huge Run away Here comes that Spider-Burke Doo-doo~

01-18-2012, 12:08 AM	#86
BigDemonicBunny 75 kilos of Killer Rabbit Join Date: Jun 2004 Posts: 195	On one hand, it's probably just a dream. On the other hand, considering the rest of the bunch I could totally see The Judge having creepy dream haunting powers.

01-20-2012, 04:45 PM	#88
Domestibot Shyguy Join Date: Jun 2009 Posts: 105	I dig Erin's conversation with herself, but I'm just gonna throw out my two cents: Since you kinda lost her German mannerisms and diction, it's (only a bit) tedious to kind of have to read the whole panel, determine who is saying what, then reread it again in context. Again, it only takes like an extra two seconds to guess who is saying what. Erin at this point seems to have been relegated to the role of clueless wanderer, and goth-fairy girl would be the one saying anything... well, Goth. The point I'm making is that without any form of sound and only having text to go on, we kind of have to read the whole thing and go "okay, Erin is saying that." I think a good way to consider clarifying whom is speaking right off the bat would be to give each character their own respective speech bubble, kind of like Brian did for Garland, Vilbert, Black Mage when he was evil, etc. Some kind of distinction like that (even if it's only a subtle font change or outline of the bubble) would probably help. Lettering is something I've done in the past, so I'm just trying to give you something to consider. Even if you keep things as is, it's still understandable.